I read two speeches, one by Baran and one by Ben Buchmeier. They had different topics and I found Baran's speech more interesting because he talked about how much strrugles he went through when he first moved to United States. It was a topic that I have full understanding on so I was definitely able to put myslef into it and share the emotion and ideas of it. I think it was really good that his sentences were very clear and easily worded. He usedeasy terms and short sentences to provide much clear explanation of his experience. In both essays, by Baran and Ben, they both had short funny stories to strongly emphasize their theme of the essay. Ithink I can try to adapt that skills to use in my essay
The on thing I did not likefrom both essays were that their massages were not that strong. Baran's one was story and Ben's one was thanking Cheshire Academy.If they had clear massage on what they actuall believe through their experience, their essays will be much stronger.
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